Audience Feedback

I asked several students and members of staff at school to give me feedback on how my first draft was. I had very similar feedback from both students and teachers.

The Good points:
"Mise-en-scene is very well done and looks authentic to the time period"
"Mise-en-scene has come through"
"Excellent prop design"
"Lighting is almost professional!"
"Well kept within time period by putting titles in the actual frame instead of in post production. It really helps support the idea of this being real sepia footage."
"Makes sense"

Places were I need to improve:

"Its too long"
"Needs more effects"
"Cuts need to be faster"
"Need to play around with the sepia effect more to make it more authentic"
"Make it shorter!"

Since my audience feedback I have adapted my film so that the cuts are sharper and that film is no longer 4 Minutes 20, but now it is down to 2 minuets 30. I have all so played around with the effects to give me the best sepia I can possibly get from Final Cut. But since I have cut so much time the titles are no longer in the shot but have been added in during post production. It was not the major factor to the film but it did make it more authentic and I have lost out one of my good points.